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- From: pae (@ global25.citicorp.com)
on: Thu Feb 4 16:02:10
The story titled "MUTTAI PAROTTA" is in Murasu Anjal.
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Worldwide Copyright: pae (1999-9999)
- From: Ramki (@ pm062-28.spindler.wmich.edu)
on: Thu Feb 4 18:03:42
Excellent Pae
- From: RR (@ pb.cache.nlanr.net)
on: Fri Feb 5 05:41:42
Pae, Jeffery Archer touch. Great!
- From: aruLarasan (@ psiphi.umsl.edu)
on: Fri Feb 5 12:27:32
hi pae,
imo, your style has improved a lot. a good break from the kumudham style. the story is ... stereotypical.
- From: SA (@ spider-wj043.proxy.aol.com)
on: Sat Feb 6 15:22:18
pae, good work. keep them coming.
- From: pae (@ globalb25.citicorp.com)
on: Mon Feb 8 09:12:08
Thanks, Ramki, RR, Arul, SA
- From: Udhaya (@ 205.218.142.217)
on: Tue Feb 23 21:06:18
pae,
This is still only a very slight deviation from your usual story structure, but you score big on character development here. Subbu is alive and breathing. Also, the setting and dialogues are well endowed. Good stuff.
- From: babu (@ 198.153.135.42)
on: Fri Feb 26 11:15:01
Excellent pae, just beautiful. One of the very beautiful stories I have read in the recent times. Keep it up. Wish I could write such simple stories :-)
I mean it, the story is excellent.
- From: puls (@ 208.242.36.102)
on: Thu Mar 4 19:25:34
pae maama,
dhool..supera irundhuchu...romba simple'a stoy kondu poitu kadaisi'la ethipaarkadha padi mudichirundheenga..very creative..konjam kooda guess panna villai naan ending ipadi irukkum endru. liked it very much.simple yet great work.keep it up.
- From: pae (@ global25.citicorp.com)
on: Fri Mar 5 11:38:04
Thank you so much Babu and Puls
- From: chandy (@ 209.125.83.228)
on: Fri Mar 5 17:15:54
Pae,
the story was just too good. Edirpaarkaadha mudivu.. Romba simple-a eduthundu poitu, you gave a bang on head in the climax!!! You shd definitely sumbit this for publication somewhere (yaan petra inbam peruga ivvaiyagam).
Keep up the good work
chandy
- From: Gokul (@ gatekeeper.ohioedison.com)
on: Mon Mar 8 17:50:21
pae, cool one. Subbu's naivette is shown neatly. Also the way u have described the muttai parOtta takes me to the kaiyEndi bhavans in TN:)
- From: pae (@ global25.citicorp.com)
on: Tue Mar 9 14:16:43
Thanks, Chandy, Gokul
Gokul, MP-lam sapduvaelaa ?:))
- From: G (@ gatekeeper.ohioedison.com)
on: Tue Mar 9 19:10:25
pae:) MP bEshA saappittu irukkEn in kayEndhi bhavan-la!
[appuram "avastththai" pattadhum undu:-)]
- From: NOV (@ 202.184.134.8)
on: Wed Mar 17 04:10:13
Pae - Nice story with good twist.
Although I am wondering why the boy didn't ask his mom ouright. Isn't that how boys his age would behave?
BTW, are you saying that the mother is the teacher's mistress? OR am I missing something? :-))
- From: pae (@ globalb25.citicorp.com)
on: Wed Mar 17 10:43:38
NOV, thanks. Summa ellarum kadhai ezhutharangalaenu, nanum ezhuthinaen. Kelvi-lam kaettu romba paduthatheenga !
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